No Deft Theft

Friday Fictioneers hosted by author Rochelle Wisoff-Fields at Addicted To Purple.

The guidelines are: include the photo-prompt in your story, have a beginning, middle and end, and keep it around 100 words.

This is my first fling with the Friday Fictioneers.  I’m crashing the party.  I hope that’s cool.

Very challenging to create in such confines.  I like the exercise.

Enjoy!

 

Copyright -Anelephantcant

 

No Deft Theft

He was pleased with himself.  Making his getaway like that showed smarts some said he didn’t have.

Traffic?  License plate taken down?  Nope, and nope.

He dumped the bag and counted the coins.  Three tries, three different totals.

God he hated counting.

Okay, he wasn’t smart at some stuff, but that bike plan was smart; ditched it and walked away.

Wait…

He didn’t wear gloves.  Oh no!  They sure as heck ran his prints and could be coming right now to put him away!

Dang!  He wasn’t smart at all!

So Stupid!  I should’ve never broke into that candy machine!

 

Word Count: 100

 

~CLS~

 

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  1. Nice to see you joining in here Christopher. Having read your fiction before, I look forward to more 🙂

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    • Christopher Shawbell

       /  July 22, 2013

      I will definitely be doing the FF challenge again. I loved the exercise. I come from screenwriting, so I know brevity is king, but it is easy to loose sight of that in freestyle writing, and therefore end up relinquishing very important standards of the craft. I don’t want those tools to dull.
      See you next week!
      ~Chris

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  2. Dear Christopher,

    Welcome aboard! Nice concise and well written story. I look forward to reading more from you.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Christopher Shawbell

       /  July 22, 2013

      Thank you, Rochelle, for taking the time to read my piece.
      I enjoyed the mega-brevity challenge. I’m used to editing 700-800 words down to 500. I had to do 179 to 100 here, but I knew I had some fat in there. It reminds me of a scene writing practice I would do for screenwriting. My guideline was: enter the scene as late as possible and leave the scene as soon as possible. It applies to freestyle writing as well, of course, but with 100 words it really has to be adhered to. It was fun, and I will definitely be doing it again.
      Thanks again.
      ~Chris

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  3. Welcome, Christopher. No party crashing here, there are enough party hats for everyone. I like the way you twisted your story at the end to be about a boy, rather than the grown thief I was expecting. Glad you joined and see you next week.

    janet

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    • Christopher Shawbell

       /  July 22, 2013

      Thanks, Janet. I appreciate you reading. It was fun.
      ~C

      Reply

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